(HW 36) triangle partners....

Michelle,
By reading your draft, I can tell that your paper is mainly about the roles we play in order to be cool and who affects it such as family and friends. Without us realizing, we play certain roles which are not our own or "unique". We dwell on how we can be better than others around us just to gain that respect of cool. We might even change our roles depending on our day or the group we are hanging out with. Overall, good start to a paper, my only suggestion would be more evidence other than your family. It seems as if your limited. :)

Larche,
Your draft was good. It transitioned well. I see where your going with this and i have no doubt that this will defiently be a great final paper. As Jin said you can clear and sharpen your thesis a little more an even add to it. Overall great draft :D